Post by stennick on Oct 12, 2008 12:58:41 GMT -5
Ok so I vaeguley remember you Tony I think that you’ve been around in some for or another for a while. None the less same thing for everyone applies to you. I’m honest with my opinions and thoughts, I try not to be overly vicious or mean with my comments so if I say something that makes you upset just let me know through PM and I’ll tone it down a notch or just not review your shows anymore who knows. Anyway lets get on with this version of ECW that you have going on here.
Regal Promo
Although it wasn’t word for word what Regal would say I gotta say you had the character down the smug classy Brit was coming through loud and clear. I dig Elijah Burke so anything that puts him on the spotlight is fine by me. Punk being attacked by Jericho while Dreamer makes the save draws the battle lines very nicely.
Backstage Promo
So Dreamer vs. Balls, I guess Dreamer is going over in that one, or they’ll do the whole “Dreamer is fired yet still showing up and wreaking havoc” gimmick.
Striker vs. Rhodes
I did not like this match. Why in the world did Rhodes squash Striker in a minute and a half. I just think this match could have gone five minutes with that same ending. I really did not like this match, the T.V title tournament should be a way of showing the fans “these are the kind of matches this T.V title is going to produce”. Not 1 minute squash matches that does nothing for either man. Sorry I just don’t like the idea of Cody Rhodes beating anyone in a minute and a half.
The Hooliganz vs. The Stampede Bulldogs
GREAT fucking match. If you would have put half the effort into the previous one you’d be sitting at 2 for 2. None the less this is the best tag match I’ve read since I’ve been back and by far one of the top five matches I’ve read period. That includes Frogg, Den, Trips, Binky so yeah your match writing is very good atleast for this match lets see if you can follow it up.
Tag Team Titles Backstage
That Jimmy Wang Yang promo didn’t sound very Jimmy Wang Yangish it sounded more Joe Somebody generic babyface “we’re gonna win”. I dunno the segment didn’t really interest me.
Burke vs. Delaney
Heres the thing about this match, I loved the fact that it was a wild crazy insane brawl that had Sandman returning. I didn’t like that Delaney a jobber beat Burke the “Savior” of the promotion, its obvious your building up Burke to be something big and no matter how Delaney won you don’t want Burke losing. You could have had Sandman get Delaney a DQ win, or you could have had Burke beat Delaney and then Sandman brawl with him. I get that you wanted to cause Burke some humiliation but I think that making him lose to Delaney was a bad call. Too many other good choices that could beat Burke and get more out of it than Delaney who looked weak the way it is. Its not like that match is going to make Colin look like a real threat to anyone. It basically just humiliates Burke and there are easier more protective ways of doing that than jobbing him out to Delaney in a match that does NOTHING for Delaney. My point is the match was designed to embarrass and humiliate Burke since that match would do nothing for the cred of Delaney as a wrestler. So there for if the match isn’t designed to do anything for Delaney than that means it was designed to make Burke look bad which is fine, but Sandman beating the hell out of him for five minutes would have done just as good, if not more for the angle.
Shelton vs. Kingson
Your matches are very hit and miss. I don’t know if you write a long match then get bored or exhausted with it so you write a squash match or what exactly your trying to get across but this T.V title tournament. You had a squash, an interference ridden fluke pinfall and now another squash. Is that what your telling everyone we’re going to see with this ECW T.V Title tournament. The same title that gave us Lynn vs. RVD is now dropped to one minute squashes and overbooked upset brawls? I’m disappointed with this tournament to say the least.
Chavo and Punk promos
I didn’t get into the Chavo promo at all “Chavo is for real” just didn’t sound all that great. On the other hand the Punk promo was VERY good. Either your promos are very generic or very good just like your matches things seem to be very hit and miss right now on this show.
Punk vs. Jericho
Another GREAT match man. See if I could have that effort put into the other matches we wouldn’t have a match problem at all on this card. Instead I’m thinking this next match is going to be a short squash match.
Balls vs. Tommy
So not a squash match but I’m not sure this match should have gone on last. I would have flip flopped the last two matches. This match was good but it wasn’t on the level of the Jericho/Punk match.
Overall
The first thing I’d like to address is the presentation of the show. I got so lost in all of the black and blue. Some pictures, some varying text size, something to break it up. Its very hard to keep track of where your at in the show with everything running together. I think I missed something so I got back and read the same thing again. Pictures, graphics, anything bigger text in some spots anything to make the show a bit more identifiable.
Next again the match writing is there I saw it in the tag match, in the Jericho/Punk match and even in the Dreamer/Balls match. Ironically the matches that weren’t the T.V Title matches. I think more effort needs to be put into all the matches. I’m not against squashes but during a t.v title tournament? That’s the place for back and forth, edge of your seat competition to show off how badly these men want this title. I understand how exhausted mentally it can be to write great match after great match. That’s not what I’m asking for, I’m just asking for more than a minute worth of ring time for tournament matches. Squash matches are one thing although I think with this being a t.v show one squash match is enough per show and should mostly be used to build up an unbeatable type of ring technician or monster.
Next the promos Jericho, Regal, Punk, Styles and Tazz were all written very well. You seemed to write everyone as Joe Smith good guy or Joe Smith bad guy. Even if your not sure what they sound like in “real life”. Give them some life. Give them a character all to yourself, give them anything to make them stand out as more than words on a page.
On that note the pacing of the show as very good. You had a nice blend of promos and wrestling, you had storyline development for both mid card and main event. You built towards next week while referencing last week. All of these are very important and you nailed them very well. I would recommend the show mostly for the Jericho/Punk and the Hooliganz/Bulldogs match. Those two matches were some of the best written matches I’ve read so far. I also like the wild crazy Sandman brawl, I like where your headed with a lot of the stories my biggest problems were the poor match writing or lack of effort I should say in half the written matches and the bland promos we ran across a time or two. So lets get some better matches written for the whole card not just half the matches, and lets work on developing and fleshing out these characters as your own. I really do enjoy your storylines and I’m interested in the Regal’s Regime vs. Punk and Dreamer. Your tag team rivalry has me interested, the Sandman story has me interested. So from a story telling aspect your doing just fine, just a few things that need worked on.
P.S up next is Hobo’s WCWA Retro Night so expect that sometime tonight.
Regal Promo
Although it wasn’t word for word what Regal would say I gotta say you had the character down the smug classy Brit was coming through loud and clear. I dig Elijah Burke so anything that puts him on the spotlight is fine by me. Punk being attacked by Jericho while Dreamer makes the save draws the battle lines very nicely.
Backstage Promo
So Dreamer vs. Balls, I guess Dreamer is going over in that one, or they’ll do the whole “Dreamer is fired yet still showing up and wreaking havoc” gimmick.
Striker vs. Rhodes
I did not like this match. Why in the world did Rhodes squash Striker in a minute and a half. I just think this match could have gone five minutes with that same ending. I really did not like this match, the T.V title tournament should be a way of showing the fans “these are the kind of matches this T.V title is going to produce”. Not 1 minute squash matches that does nothing for either man. Sorry I just don’t like the idea of Cody Rhodes beating anyone in a minute and a half.
The Hooliganz vs. The Stampede Bulldogs
GREAT fucking match. If you would have put half the effort into the previous one you’d be sitting at 2 for 2. None the less this is the best tag match I’ve read since I’ve been back and by far one of the top five matches I’ve read period. That includes Frogg, Den, Trips, Binky so yeah your match writing is very good atleast for this match lets see if you can follow it up.
Tag Team Titles Backstage
That Jimmy Wang Yang promo didn’t sound very Jimmy Wang Yangish it sounded more Joe Somebody generic babyface “we’re gonna win”. I dunno the segment didn’t really interest me.
Burke vs. Delaney
Heres the thing about this match, I loved the fact that it was a wild crazy insane brawl that had Sandman returning. I didn’t like that Delaney a jobber beat Burke the “Savior” of the promotion, its obvious your building up Burke to be something big and no matter how Delaney won you don’t want Burke losing. You could have had Sandman get Delaney a DQ win, or you could have had Burke beat Delaney and then Sandman brawl with him. I get that you wanted to cause Burke some humiliation but I think that making him lose to Delaney was a bad call. Too many other good choices that could beat Burke and get more out of it than Delaney who looked weak the way it is. Its not like that match is going to make Colin look like a real threat to anyone. It basically just humiliates Burke and there are easier more protective ways of doing that than jobbing him out to Delaney in a match that does NOTHING for Delaney. My point is the match was designed to embarrass and humiliate Burke since that match would do nothing for the cred of Delaney as a wrestler. So there for if the match isn’t designed to do anything for Delaney than that means it was designed to make Burke look bad which is fine, but Sandman beating the hell out of him for five minutes would have done just as good, if not more for the angle.
Shelton vs. Kingson
Your matches are very hit and miss. I don’t know if you write a long match then get bored or exhausted with it so you write a squash match or what exactly your trying to get across but this T.V title tournament. You had a squash, an interference ridden fluke pinfall and now another squash. Is that what your telling everyone we’re going to see with this ECW T.V Title tournament. The same title that gave us Lynn vs. RVD is now dropped to one minute squashes and overbooked upset brawls? I’m disappointed with this tournament to say the least.
Chavo and Punk promos
I didn’t get into the Chavo promo at all “Chavo is for real” just didn’t sound all that great. On the other hand the Punk promo was VERY good. Either your promos are very generic or very good just like your matches things seem to be very hit and miss right now on this show.
Punk vs. Jericho
Another GREAT match man. See if I could have that effort put into the other matches we wouldn’t have a match problem at all on this card. Instead I’m thinking this next match is going to be a short squash match.
Balls vs. Tommy
So not a squash match but I’m not sure this match should have gone on last. I would have flip flopped the last two matches. This match was good but it wasn’t on the level of the Jericho/Punk match.
Overall
The first thing I’d like to address is the presentation of the show. I got so lost in all of the black and blue. Some pictures, some varying text size, something to break it up. Its very hard to keep track of where your at in the show with everything running together. I think I missed something so I got back and read the same thing again. Pictures, graphics, anything bigger text in some spots anything to make the show a bit more identifiable.
Next again the match writing is there I saw it in the tag match, in the Jericho/Punk match and even in the Dreamer/Balls match. Ironically the matches that weren’t the T.V Title matches. I think more effort needs to be put into all the matches. I’m not against squashes but during a t.v title tournament? That’s the place for back and forth, edge of your seat competition to show off how badly these men want this title. I understand how exhausted mentally it can be to write great match after great match. That’s not what I’m asking for, I’m just asking for more than a minute worth of ring time for tournament matches. Squash matches are one thing although I think with this being a t.v show one squash match is enough per show and should mostly be used to build up an unbeatable type of ring technician or monster.
Next the promos Jericho, Regal, Punk, Styles and Tazz were all written very well. You seemed to write everyone as Joe Smith good guy or Joe Smith bad guy. Even if your not sure what they sound like in “real life”. Give them some life. Give them a character all to yourself, give them anything to make them stand out as more than words on a page.
On that note the pacing of the show as very good. You had a nice blend of promos and wrestling, you had storyline development for both mid card and main event. You built towards next week while referencing last week. All of these are very important and you nailed them very well. I would recommend the show mostly for the Jericho/Punk and the Hooliganz/Bulldogs match. Those two matches were some of the best written matches I’ve read so far. I also like the wild crazy Sandman brawl, I like where your headed with a lot of the stories my biggest problems were the poor match writing or lack of effort I should say in half the written matches and the bland promos we ran across a time or two. So lets get some better matches written for the whole card not just half the matches, and lets work on developing and fleshing out these characters as your own. I really do enjoy your storylines and I’m interested in the Regal’s Regime vs. Punk and Dreamer. Your tag team rivalry has me interested, the Sandman story has me interested. So from a story telling aspect your doing just fine, just a few things that need worked on.
P.S up next is Hobo’s WCWA Retro Night so expect that sometime tonight.
