Post by Hobo on Apr 20, 2008 18:32:32 GMT -5
The harsh yet honest opinions of J.Hobo are that of his own and do not reflect that of Wrestling Afterlife, any of it's sponsors, or any of the other admins. Hobo is just a prick
In a lot of cases, you over describe stuff, or describe stuff in the wrong ways. Like, SeXXXy Eddy's match..
His music cleared and then Sexxxy Eddy’s theme played, and he walked out, with baggy gym pants that are blue, and a jacket with flower’s designed all over it.
Description of his gear really isn't needed and just seems to be there to make the show longer. It's one of those cases where I always used to argue with ant, quality over quantity. Instead of describing stuff like that, focus on stuff that really matters.
Add crowd reactions to your shows.. From this show, I cannot honestly tell you one person who is face or heel. Everyone just seems to be a dim shade of gray. Add more emotion into your promos. Have your wrestlers babyface to the crowd or heel on the crowd.
The created characters really have to go.. It's getting ridicious. Maggot Man is about the dumbest thing I have read since Goth Dude. Joe, Sammy B, and use of your own efed character within HWA all do nothing but hurt the fed, honestly.. There's no way to visualize..
Likewise, I go back to the same discussion I had about when you started using Matsunaga with your use of Viking and Brandon Prophet. Neither really move or act as the real person do and just seem to be out there for the sake of being out there. Viking is known for being a ridiciously stiff chopper.. Prophet known for taking unbelievable beatings.. why didn't any of this happen?
Commentary is just rotten.. Listen to stuff like Joey Styles' commentary from the original ECW, anything by Gordon Solie, and read stuff like Tennessee's CWF, Stennick's WCW and RCW, and to put myself over in a way even though I don't write my own commentary half the time, WCWA, for a general idea how to do commentary and write it.
You've got some decent ideas, just poor execution of said ideas.
In a lot of cases, you over describe stuff, or describe stuff in the wrong ways. Like, SeXXXy Eddy's match..
His music cleared and then Sexxxy Eddy’s theme played, and he walked out, with baggy gym pants that are blue, and a jacket with flower’s designed all over it.
Description of his gear really isn't needed and just seems to be there to make the show longer. It's one of those cases where I always used to argue with ant, quality over quantity. Instead of describing stuff like that, focus on stuff that really matters.
Add crowd reactions to your shows.. From this show, I cannot honestly tell you one person who is face or heel. Everyone just seems to be a dim shade of gray. Add more emotion into your promos. Have your wrestlers babyface to the crowd or heel on the crowd.
The created characters really have to go.. It's getting ridicious. Maggot Man is about the dumbest thing I have read since Goth Dude. Joe, Sammy B, and use of your own efed character within HWA all do nothing but hurt the fed, honestly.. There's no way to visualize..
Likewise, I go back to the same discussion I had about when you started using Matsunaga with your use of Viking and Brandon Prophet. Neither really move or act as the real person do and just seem to be out there for the sake of being out there. Viking is known for being a ridiciously stiff chopper.. Prophet known for taking unbelievable beatings.. why didn't any of this happen?
Commentary is just rotten.. Listen to stuff like Joey Styles' commentary from the original ECW, anything by Gordon Solie, and read stuff like Tennessee's CWF, Stennick's WCW and RCW, and to put myself over in a way even though I don't write my own commentary half the time, WCWA, for a general idea how to do commentary and write it.
You've got some decent ideas, just poor execution of said ideas.
